Sparse. Wordy. Show. Don’t tell.
Tastes? More sounds. Missed the smells.
Voice. Passive. Point of view.
Lay, not lie. Details too few.
Scene. No hook. Just talking heads.
Tags. Dialog. Too many ‘saids.’
Note. Listen. Don’t defend.
Think. Rewrite. Read again.
(copyright Kay Goodnight 2015)
